Scene’s in just Green are the people’s thoughts.

Howie: That’s just a detail Jackie Boy. I’m talking about the principle here. You don’t leave old friends without saying goodbye.
Bobby: Well, the sheila did honor the principle. She’s here, isn’t she?

We pick up from here still at the bullpen

Ottis: Well Howie come one we have to go we have a dealing at the other side of town.
Sue: I’m sorry again about not tell you, Do you want to go with us to have a party.
Myles: Which will not be at my house.
Lucy: Oh come on Myles you have the best house for it.
Myles: Give up it is not happening there.
Bobby: We could always go with D to the school.
Myles: Know that is a good idea.
Bobby: Then go and Party at Myles house.
Jack I second.
Tara: Then it’s settled.
Myles: Hey people does anybody want my opinion?
all together No!
Myles: Okay then.
Sue: Great then it’s all settled.
Howie: I know this will disappoint you all but I can’t go.
Myles: Oh what a shame, you know this could be a great party after all.
Bobby: Then we’ll meet at D’s house at 5:00 on the 4th at D’s house then go from there.

The Team get’s back to work and Howie and Ottis leave. Jack goes over to Sue’s desk.
Jack: What time do you want me to pick you up at? And don’t argue you know you won’t win cause I am picking you up.
Sue: Who said I would argue. I would say around 4:30.
Jack: Great I’ll be there.


Scene: Lucy and Sue’s house on the 4th at 4:29
Jack:Dang it I even drove slow and I am early. We’ll I can just walk really slow.
Jack is very slowly walking up to the door then gets to it and knocks. Scene: Inside the apartment.

More to come VERY soon.

Jack is very slowly walking up to the door then gets to it and knocks. Scene: Inside the apartment.
Lucy: I see Jack coming up.
Lucy goes and press’s her ear up against the door then looks through the peek hole and then keep rotating.
Sue: Lucy come away from that door!
Lucy comes away and goes in the kitchen Sue fallows so she doesn’t rush to the door. Then Jack rings the bell. Sue trying to walk slow but comes out almost running for the door. She opens it.
Jack: Hi wow you look great.
Sue: Thanks you ready?
Jack: Lucy want to come with us?
Sue: No.
Jack: You sure why don’t we just ask anyway. Luce you want to come with us?
Lucy: Nope I will be along shortly.
Jack: Okay so you there.

Every body meets at D’s house they leave and go to the school where the performance is starting in 10 minutes.

Announcer: Ladies and Gentlemen we would like to welcome you here today for this special program in which we will here from David Gans in a talk about the Declaration of Independence.
Everybody claps then David gets up.

David I wrote this eassay with my father and his friends in mind as they are FBI agents and protect our freedom and Independnce that we so freely in joy from our day to day life. The Declaration was brought forth in 1776 to Independence hall to declare freedom from England. When Abraham Lincoln spoke at his first inaugural he had this to say.

"The Union is much older than the Constitution. It was formed, in fact, by the Articles of Association in 1774. It was matured and continued by the Declaration of Independence in 1776. It was further matured, and the faith of all the then thirteen States expressly plighted and engaged that it should be perpetual, by the Articles of Confederation in 1778. And finally, in 1787, one of the declared objects for ordaining and establishing the Constitution was 'to form a more perfect Union.'” This is why today on this day of July 4th we celebrate our Independence and I want to take this time to thank all the men and woman of the Military who are fighting to keep our independence and to give more country’s independence and to thanks all the law enforcement for all they do and I would like to ask my dad and his friends come up as I read a certain part in it.



The whole team comes up to the stage as they are all the people are clapping there are a few deaf people who are clapping in ASL.

David: It says here. "We hold these truths to be self-evident, that all men are created equal, that they are endowed by their Creator with certain unalienable Rights, that among these are Life, Liberty and the pursuit of Happiness."

And my dad and these people fight for Liberty and happiness of this country.

All the people clap and stand up then singer’s come up and sing the Star spangled banner.

Dimitrius and the team start to tear up and they all share a happy cry at what David has just said.

a half hour later they wind up at Myles house who already has games and all sorts of stuff prepared for the party,

Lucy: I have an idea lets play truth or dare.
Jack: Alright come one everybody lets get in a circle.
Bobby: Okay so Jack truth or dare?
Jack: Truth
Bobby: Sparky is it true that you where making out with Sue?
Jack: Yes.
Bobby: wa whoo.
Jack: So Crash Truth or dare.
Bobby: Truth.
Jack: Is it true that you where kissing Tara?
Bobby: True
Myles: We got the dirt now.
Bobby: Sue Truth or dare?
Sue: Dare!
Bobby: I dare you to go kiss Jack for 2 minutes strait.
Sue Goes over to Jack and they start kissing
Myles: The clock is ticking,

Then after 2 minutes are up.
Myles: Okay times up whoo.

They keep on kissing away.
Myles: You can stop it now…..Please stop it now……I am going to kick you out if you don’t stop.
Bobby: Why they would only go do it somewhere else.

Then the scene fads away looking at them kissing away………

WHEW! Got most of it in there in one post! Great job!

And great job on Davey's essay!

Good job, Lincoln. Especially the kissing part.

Not bad with the essay too :laughs:

Hey guys thanks I have never written an Essay so I had no idea what was in one.
And yeah it is small I wrote it really fast

But it was really good, Linc!


I'm loving your story!!!


Is there more? or is that all?

That was fun! I wasn't brave enough to try writing an essay for D's son... It's hard enough writing the story itself without trying to write a winner within a winner! I liked it.

Short, sweet and straight to the point...

aww liked david's recital of the declaration of independence.