This is my first time entering a challenge, well I had a good idea of one, I hope I do good on here and I hope you guys will post replies so I am going to try this. I hope you like. Let me know what you think. Here is the first part. Enjoy!!!


It was a nice day at the FBI Bullpen everyone was so excited, someone was getting married. Everyone knew about this but Sue Thomas. Jack walks in the bullpen all excited that he is getting married to the woman he loves, he asked her to get married last night and they have a nice wedding to plan but the worst part is, how is he going to tell Sue?

Sue walks in the bullpen and smiles at everyone.

" Good Morning everyone. Sue says and walks to her desk.

Everyone smiles at her. Tara goes to Lucy and says. " We need to tell her.

" I agree but who? Lucy asked.

" I think Jack should tell her, I Mean after all it is his wedding. Bobby said.

" Yes Jack you go tell Sue.

" I cant tell her. Jack said.

As they were talking Sue walked up to them.

" Tell me what? Sue asked her face, wondering what was going on.




What you guys think? Good or bad? Should I continue, Remember this is my first time entering this thing. So let me know what you think.

Thanks.



Mallory

Jack is marrying someone else and Sue doesn't even know?

kav

I hope not

Mallory, what have you done???

BTW, glad to see you entered into the challenge!! Can't wait for more!!!

Joy

Jack can't love this woman he asked to marry him because he loves Sue.
AND if was true which it is not cus Jack can't love anyone but Sue HE is the one who has to tell SUe.

Mallory, I know i said I was glad that you entered in the challenge - but Jack getting married to some one else!!!!!!????????? I think Sue will have to learn how to be a wedding crasher - for the sakes of all of these anxious readers out here! As someone said on my story, you've only just started the story and already with the cliffies???!!! Post more soon! Please! Lovin it so far tho! From Jenny

Oh wow. Poor Sue, and what is Jack thinking he's doing?

mal wow now that's a nice twist!!


rosa i think that agood question?!??!


JACK what in the world were you thinking ?!?! who are you going to marry ALLIE?!?! JESSICA ?!?!? ELEANOR?!?! WHO??!?!?


can't wait for more!!

Thanks for all the comment guys. Here is the next part.


" Tell me what? Sue asked again.

No one was telling her a thing, she was getting a little annoyed. " What is going on guys? She could tell by Jack's face that something was going on.

" Jack you need to tell Sue what you told us today, she will be happy for you. Myles said.

Jack gave Myles a hard look.

" Jack what is going on? Sue asked again.

Jack turned around and faced Sue. He took her hands. " Let's go in the confernce room to talk.

Sue nodded and walked out of the bullpen with Jack. Everyone looked at each other. " I hope Sue can handle it. Bobby said.


IN THE CONFERNCE ROOM:

" Sue have a seat. Jack said.

Sue sat down and Jack sat across from her.

" Jack what's going on? Is everything ok?

" Yes everything is great Sue.

" Then what's going on?

" Sue, I dont want to hurt you but I am ... Jack started.

" You are what? Sue asked a little confused.

" I am getting married. Jack said with a smile.

Sue's face dropped.

" What? Sue asked looking shocked.

" I am getting married. Jack said again.

" To who? Sue asked.

" All.... Jack started to say. He didnt want to say her name. He knew how much Sue did not like Allie.

" Allie? Are you trying to say Allie? Sue asked.

Jack nodded. " Yes I am.

Sue could not believe it.

" Well congrats Jack. I hope you will be very happy. Sue said and walked out of the conference room.




Mallory

i'm speechless......... doesn't happen often.

ALLIE!!!!!!!!!!???????????

AAAARRRGGGHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!

has the man lost his marbles?

cath

Must have some ridiculously noble reason for doing this. It certainly can't be love.

Jill

kav

Mallory, girl have you totally lost your mind? Now I know why you wouldnt tell me who Jack was marrying! I dont think I can bring myself to read anymore of this

Someone please tell me when it is over

Why does Allie always have to ruin the picture?

Sue walked in the bullpen swinging the door open as hard as she can. She walked to her desk with tears in her eyes. She was so hurt, angry at Jack, she thought they had something special with Jack, she thought Jack liked her, the way he stared at her, the way he took her out to dinner, maybe she was dreaming it. Her feelings for Jack is so strong she dont know what she will do. Lucy saw Sue coming in, actually everyone saw them. They knew she was upset. Sue went to her desk and sat in her chair and did her paperwork not making eye contact with anyone.

Lucy walked to her desk and tapped her on the shoulder.

" Sue are you ok?

" No I am not ok. Why didnt you tell me that Jack was getting married?

" Well we didnt know till today, I am sorry Sue.

" Dont worry about it. Sue said with tears in her eyes.

" You are hurt. Lucy said.

" Yes very, but I will be ok. Sue said and tried to smile.

As they were talking Jack walked in, he looked over at Sue and he could tell she has been crying, He knew he hurt her. He went over to her.

" Sue.

" What?

" I am sorry if I hurt you.

" Dont worry about it Jack, I am happy for you.

" Good, so you are not upset? Jack asked.

"No, why would I be? I mean we are just friends and you are getting married.

" Well thank you, but I want you in the wedding.

" You want me what?

" Yes I want you in the wedding, Sue you are my best friend please be in my wedding.

" No thanks. Sue said.

Jack was hurt, he did not expect this. " What you mean no?

" I mean no. I will not be attending the wedding. Sue said and walked out of the bullpen.

WOW. Here is my list since you posted two bits:

1: ALLIE!!!!! How could you???
2: Jack is mean enough to ask Sue to be in his WEDDING!!!!
3: As learningtosign correctly said: has the man lost his marbles!!!!!!
4: Is it possible to be scared out of your brain whilst eating cheerios? I have!
5: Sue had better become a wedding crasher!!
6: Allie better become nice and call it off for Jack and Sue's sake!
7: I can't think of any more.

Great job Mallory but Allie? Did you have to? But hey ho, I trust you. You will bring them out of this in one piece being the devoted J/S fan you are. You will won't you????? From Jenny

Firstly, Mal, what a delight to see you here and I can't wait to see your story unfold!

AHHHHHHHH!!!!!!! What have you done? Why Allie? Is Jack really going to go through with it?? NOOOO!!! I certainly hope that's going to be a happy ending. Till then, I'm going to take my seat behind my comfy couch. :hide:

oh dear

kav

Ok, so I said that I couldnt bring myself to read anymore but my curiosity got the better of me. Mallory once again I have got to ask Girl what is wrong with you? Are you trying to give us all heart attacks. I am beginning to think that you are a closet Jack/Allie fan. That has to be it. And another thing, when Sue slammed the door was Jack by any chance standing there and got got slapped in the head with it or something What is he thinking asking Sue to be in his wedding?

Jack how heartless can you be. First telling Sue you are marrying Allie of all people after you have lead Sue on all this time. YOu Jerk and than having the nerve to ask her to be inthe wedding after you know you broke her heart and she had been crying.

Oh and Allie knows Jack is inlove with Sue that is the only reason she wants to marry him.

I doubt Sue will even go tothe wedding.

I have to agree with Von!! Jack has been slapped in the head and doesn't know what he is doing!!!

Joy

Allie?!
someone better knock some sense into Jack!!

Guys, guys, Please have some faith in me. It gets better and the J/S moments will come along but not yet, You will have to continue to read it to find out more. Here is the next chapter. Enjoy



Jack looked speechless. Everyone in the bullpen knew Sue would act this way. Bobby walked up to Jack, he thought that was the best thing to do.

" Can you believe she wont even attend my wedding? Jack asked looking shocked.

" Jack, you have to understand her point of view. Bobby said.

" Her point of view? She is suppose to be happy for me. WHAT IS WRONG WITH HER? Jack asked.

" Jack dont you know?

" Know what?

" You know Sue has feelings for you.

" What? No she doesnt, she is just jealous of me.

" No Jack she is not, well maybe of you and Allie cause we all thought you would be with Sue.

" Why would you guys think that? I dont have feelings for Sue. We are just friends or I thought we were.

" Jack give her time. When is your wedding?

" In about 6 months, She cant just come up and say that she is not coming to my wedding, that is so rude, She should be there to support me and be happy for her best friend, I would do that for her. Jack said.

" Would you Jack? Or are you just saying that?

Jack looked down. " This really hurts, I want her at my wedding her of all people.


" Why Jack?

" Because.

" Because why? Why is it so important that Sue to be there? You know how much she hates Allie.

" I know, I guess I want her there because she is my friend and I can go to her about anything.

" Is it because you love her?

" No Bobby, if I loved her I would marry her not Allie. Jack said and realized of what he said.

" Jack just think it over, and how you feel toward Allie. Is this what you really want?

" Well..

" Jack dont answer that, think about it. Bobby said and walked off leaving Jack with his thoughts.

Jack sat at his desk. " Do I love Allie, do I want to marry her? Or do I love Sue? Jack thought. I know I hurt Sue, I need to talk to her. Jack thought and walked out of the bullpen with everyone watching.

Jack, do you need me to hit you with something?? Of course you love Sue!!!

Joy

Oh boy! What has Jack gotten into now? And is his head on straight? We know who he is in love with and ain't Allie! C'mon Jack, wake up!

Great job, Mallory.

Jack, don't rush into things...

ummm Mallory dear I think you forgot to finish your post. You forgot the converstaion that Jack was suppose to have with SUe about his wedding with she who must not be named. Cus i know you would not leave us hangin there right?

Please come backa nd add soon great job

I didnt forget to finish it, the next post will be up tomorrow when I come home from work. Stay tuned. Thanks again for all the nice comments. They mean alot to me.



Mallory

Glad Bobby is thinking straight! Cos Jack is all *Jenny sniffles* I hope jack comes to his senses and the J/S moments you promised are well on their way to a computer screen near us!!!!!!! Great post! From Jenny. I'm out again tonight at band practice and then watching the rest of the STFBE eppy tonight. Maybe I will check while i'm at the library. TTFN!

can i stand in line to hit him?
cath

Oh I'm getting queasy already!

kav

Jack left the bullpen and headed toward the elevator where he knew Sue was at. He ran down there and did not see her, so he tried the parking lot. He saw her down there walking to her car. Jack caught up with her and tapped her on the shoulder. Sue turned around and saw Jack.


" Hey Jack, what do you want?

" We need to talk.

" About?


" Sue dont pull that, you know exactly what about.

" Jack I dont want to talk about it.


" Sue just tell me why you wont attend my wedding.

" Because I just dont want too Jack , ok?

" No that is not ok, I need to know.

Sue was getting a little annoying, she could not understand why Jack was not taking no for an answer. I mean why does he want me at this wedding so bad. Sue thought.

" I dont want to attend the wedding because I dont like Allie and I think you are making a big mistake.

" Why you think that? Jack asked.

" Do you love her? Sue asked.

" Yes Sue I do love her.

" Ok then, marry her, I am not stopping you. Go ahead and marry her but I wont be there to see it.

" Oh come on Sue, I want you happy for me.

" I am very happy for you Jack, why wouldnt I be?

" Well if you were happy for me, then why wont you come to my wedding and support a friend?

" I am not attending a wedding where I am not wanted.

" Sue what are you talking about? You are wanted, I am inviting you.

" Please Jack, Allie does not want me there, so I will not be there, Sorry.

" Sue I want you there, please this is very important to me. Please.

" Tell you what, I will think about it Jack and I will let you know tomorrow, but I have to go now. See ya. Sue said and got in her car and drove away.

Jack was off to Allie's apartment to go talk to her about Sue.




Mallory

not one of your brighter moves Hudson going to talk to allie about sue



cath

Sure, it might not be the brightest but it could be. I mean, if Allie gets mad at Jack for talking to her about Sue, she might get so upset and break off the engagement/marriage and then, all will be well! "

Somehow I dont think Mallory is going to make life so easy for us.

Yeah. Mallory wouldn't make life that easy. yet. I'm sure she will rescue us from this annoying pause in story soon and make sure that sometime in the future there will be some J/S moments. She is a J/S fan at heart. I trust her. Now all we have to do is get her back here!!!! He he he! great job Mallory! From Jenny

Talking to Allie about Sue, are you sure that thats such a good idea...

Great job! looking forward to more, interesting plot, the way you write each character's dialogue seems so real, very touching though I must admit I was kind of laughing on some part, but ignoring that reaction( I was only laughing cause, well.. I thought this would really be interesting) The is for this even though it's far from done is "FANTASTIC".

I wonder what Allie would say...would she understand Sue's love for Jack as well?

Good job, Mallory. Can't wait to find out what happens next.

I know Allie's a cold haerted little whatsit, but surely she would call it off and get Jack and Sue together???? Mallory, what is it with you and making Jack go with another woman and then all upsetety for Sue? If you don't come back here, I'm going to have to come after you! And post on The Past soon please! From Jenny

Jack for some one so intelligent, you are incredibly stupid! GRRRRR

Okay, Jack, I can go along with your talking to Allie about Sue - that should make Allie mad and maybe she will decide she doesn't want to marry you and........!!!

Joy

Yes, I'm quoting myself...I think talking to Allie will be a baaaaaaad idea...Jack could be so dense...

Hey everyone, Sorry it has taken me to so long to write this next chapter up, I have been gone to the beach and I just have got this chapter written, I will try to keep up this time. Here is the next part and thanks for being so patient. Enjoy!!! Comments please.


ALLIE'S APARTMENT:


Jack knocked on the door waiting on Allie to come to the door. She opened it and smiled.

" Hey Sweety. Allie said and kissed Jack on the lips.

" Come in.

" Thanks.

Jack walked in and walked in the living room and sat on the couch. Allie walked over to him.

" Jack what's wrong?

" Allie we have to talk.

" Sure what about?

" Are we doing the right thing?

" What? Getting married? Allie asked.

" Yes, I mean are we doing the right thing?

" Jack how can you ask that? Of course we are doing the right thing. Dont you love me?

" Yes I do love you but I guess I am just scared. Jack said and looked down.

" Jack I am scared too but I know that we love each other and we are getting married, we belong together. Allie said and grabbed Jack's hand.

Jack just nodded.

" Dont you think so? Allie asked.

" Allie I think we are, It's just that... Jack began

" It's just what? Are you having doubts?

" Well no, it's Sue.

Allie was worried now. " I know he isnt falling for Sue now. Allie thought.

" What does Sue have to do with us getting married? Allie asked a little annoyed that Sue's name was mentioned in this.

" Well I want her at the wedding but she wont attend, I really want her to attend.

" Why Jack? I mean I think it is best that Sue is not there, that our wedding will go thru fine, This is your day not hers. Leave Sue out of this, she doesnt belong there.

" Allie I want her to attend cause she is my best friend, all my other friends team workers is going to be there, I want Sue there to support me, she means alot to me. I want her at my wedding. Jack said.

" Ok first what if Sue comes and doesnt support you, and what did you mean when you said that Sue meant alot to you, you mean like a girlfriend way? Allie asked.

Jack thought a minute. " No just a friend and I know that Sue will support me, she will not speak out at the wedding that is not her, so what you say can Sue come to our wedding?

Allie thought for a minute. " I guess she can come if it will make you happy, even though I dont like her.

Jack smiled. " It will be fine but I have to go now it is late, I will call you later. Jack said and kissed Allie and got up and walked toward the door.

" You make sure you call me. Allie said.

" I will. Jack said and walked out of the apartment.

Now that Allie was ok with Sue coming to the wedding now maybe he can convince Sue to come to the wedding. Jack thought.


What Jack didnt realize is that Allie had other plans up her sleeves.






To everyone who is reading the past I will post on that pretty soon, right now it is late and I am going to bed. Stay tuned for this next chapter. Thanks again for the comments.



Mallory

all i can say is i hope the other plans don't hurt sue and help jack see the light and realise that Allie is not the one for him

I don't like those plans very much...

Allie and plans ate never good!
kav

Hmmmm, Jack, does the quote "bricks for brains" mean anything to you. Wake up and smell the coffee boy.

Sue, don't cave.

Just joined in! Loving it . Why can't Jack see Sue is in love with him?? to Allie! Can't wait for more .

Take care,
Kristen

Just caught up, wow Jack marring Allie

I hope Allie doesn't have anything nasty in store for Sue

Can't wait for more