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GA fan
Oh, rerio...what wonderful posts! First...the absolute creepiness of what Sue and Tara saw and experienced! eek.gif Then the relief when it was all over (for the time being, at least). I rather liked this quote, too:

QUOTE(spogpaws @ Oct 26 2004, 09:18 PM)
Hmm, me thinks Garrett is going to have a heck of a job sorting out who's allowed to date who - pass the man an Advil, I think he's gonna need it !!!


Once again, rerio...I am so impressed with this "short" story of ours! thumbsup.gif
justme_jp3
Ah, now I'm the one relegated to the dreaded position of having to "ditto" everyone!!! LOL Actually, I don't mind, because it means I got to read everyone's reactions to those lovely, amazing, warm and fuzzy posts. Flip, I gotta tell ya, I just about fell over laughing at your goldfish line!!! So glad I wasn't eating or drinking anything while I was reading! LOL

Keep up the great work, Rerio! You sacrifice so much for us, but please know that we think it's worth it!!! wink.gif
bigfan
Rerio...I was never a M/T fan until I started reading you writing them. They are wonderful together and I loved that scene.

I love Tara's spunk and I love how Myles' loves her.
LizzyM87
Oh my gosh!! That was hilarious!! Rerio, that was wonderful. hehe. I was hoping someone would find them out. Go Jack! Wait a sec, what am I saying? Go Myles and Tara!!! wink.gif wub.gif wub.gif
Smiler
I want to but i'm not going to dittoe everyone ............ oh would you look at that, i just did! Oops!

Rerio, please know that you may not have enjoyed writing that last scene but i certainly enjoyed reading it. Fab!
baa_rammsteeein
One word WOW :eek jaw drops: - ok maybe a few more. As everything i could possibly say has been mentioned by EVERYONE else i just want to add my congratulations at such an amazing story, and it ain't even finished yet (me hopes) My stomach has been churning with all the fuzzies in this story, as well as the scares.
Well done keep it up!
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bigfan
Rerio, what's up with hanging out on your story and not posting. Girlfriend, I'm thinking that is called "teasing" and it's not nice..; mad.gif I've been waiting, waiting, waiting...drumming my fingers until they are now raw and still no post. Now I see you are gone and I left to wait until who knows when to here you describe Sue in Jack's shirt... tongue.gif.
rerio
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Rerio, what's up with hanging out on your story and not posting.
Sorry! I opened the thread and then forgot all about it. If it will make you feel better, the "shirt scene" is being written as we speak. Don't blame me; it's all Flip's fault! Look for it some time tonight or in the morning. Then I promise it's back to the main story line, with a conclusion coming soon.

I'm not taking any more suggestions! I promised to finish this thing before the contest deadline, and so I shall!
flip
QUOTE(rerio @ Oct 27 2004, 05:26 PM)
Don't blame me; it's all Flip's fault! 

Who? unsure.gif Me? smile.gif

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Rerio, what's up with hanging out on your story and not posting.
Sorry! I opened the thread and then forgot all about it. If it will make you feel better, the "shirt scene" is being written as we speak.
Can I just say......YIPEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!! bounching.gif bounching.gif



sidenote: I know I have the above backwards - but I'm just so darn excited about what is to come..........You'll just have to "live" wink.gif with it.
rerio
Myles pulled away so quickly that he almost fell over. He deliberately placed himself between Jack and Tara, trying to provide her with as much protection as he could. He decided his only hope was to depend on honor and dignity to explain the situation. “Jack,” he began stiffly, “I take full responsibility for what you just witnessed. Agent Williams was in my care; I should have used better judgment. I’ll understand if you decide that disciplinary action is necessary.”

He heard a rather unladylike snort behind him. “Myles, it’s not very nice to suggest that kissing me goes against your better judgment.” Tara reached out to gently push him aside so that she could see Jack’s face. “Jack, what Myles is trying to say in his own rather inflated manner is that he and I care about each other very much. We would have told you before now, but it’s been a pretty recent development. When I get out of the hospital, could you help us figure out what our options are at work?”

Jack nodded. “Of course.” When he saw the astonishment on Myles’ face and the relief Tara couldn’t quite hide, he smiled. “What? Do you honestly think I care more about office policies than the well being of my friends? Come talk to me when this is over, and we’ll see what needs to be done. I can’t guarantee anything, but I’ll do my best to find a solution that works for all of us.”

Myles looked at him for a long moment before holding out his hand. “Thank you,” he said formally.

Jack chuckled but shook his hand. “Tara, are you sure you know what you’re getting into?”

“No,” she replied brightly, “but you know me…I just love puzzles.”

Feeling a flush spread across his cheeks, Myles decided it was time to change the subject. “Where’s Thomas? Is she okay?”

“She’s downstairs; she should be here in a minute.” Jack approached the bed. “Tara, I hate to ask you this, but I need to know what you remember from last night.”

She took a deep breath. “Not very much, but I’ll describe it as best as I can.” Haltingly she told him of the group, the white robes, the chanting. She faltered as she tried to explain the fires and the impossibility of what she had seen just before Sue dragged her from the room. “I know it sounds crazy, but I swear that’s what happened.”

Jack shook his head. “No, your story matches perfectly with what Sue just told me in the car.” He told them the horrifying description that Sue had given him of the previous night’s events.

By the time he was done, they were all pale and shaking. Myles cradled Tara’s hand in his, no longer caring what anyone thought. Tara’s face was bewildered, almost lost. “But…it doesn’t make any sense. How?

“I don’t know,” Jack answered.

Sue walked in, interrupting the pensive atmosphere in the room. “Hi! Look who I found downstairs.” D was right behind her, carrying a large bouquet of flowers and balloons. “We brought you a present, Tara. Are you feeling better?” Sue asked.

Tara stared at the gift, feeling her eyes fill with tears. She turned almost frantically to Myles, grasping his hand with every bit of her strength. “Myles…” she whispered.

“What is it?” Sue asked, concerned.

Myles bent his head close to Tara’s. No words were spoken, and yet she seemed to find the courage she needed in his eyes. Finally she turned to Sue and spoke. “Thank you for the flowers and the balloons; they’re beautiful. I just…I was just overwhelmed that you could bring me a gift, that you could even come see me after the way I treated you. I’m so sorry.”

“I also want to apologize,” Myles said. “I’m ashamed of my behavior.”

Both Sue and D were shaking their heads. “You don’t have to apologize; it wasn’t you,” Sue said firmly. “I know what I saw last night.”

“And I know what I felt when those…whatever they were…focused their hatred on me,” D added. “You can’t be responsible for something you don’t understand, something you have no protection against.”

Sue hurried across the room to give Tara a hug. “You’re my friend; I never believed that you meant those things.”

Tara buried her face against Sue’s shoulder and cried for awhile. The others gathered around, providing support, providing affection…providing forgiveness. Finally Myles spoke again, his eyes still troubled. “There is one thing that can’t be explained by the events of the past few days.” He was obviously uncomfortable, but he made himself focus on the one person who mattered. “Thomas…Sue, I behaved badly when you joined our team. I doubted your abilities, and I treated you in a completely unprofessional manner. There is no excuse for what I said to you then; my actions were purely the result of my own narrow-minded prejudice. Your presence on our team has taught me a great deal about accepting other people and benefiting from the many strengths we all have to offer. I’m working on changing my attitudes, and I hope you can accept my most sincere apologies.

“I’m not sure I got all of that, but the important parts were there.” She studied him for a long moment. “Myles, I think we should start over.” She began to sign as she spoke. “Hi. My name is S-U-E-T-H-O-M-A-S. I’m deaf.”

He looked at her uncertainly. “You’ll have to help me.” Shaking his head slightly, his tried again. “Would you help me, please?”

It took some time. She walked him through the signs, teaching him how to fingerspell his name. Each time he got confused she patiently showed him what he was doing wrong. When he was finished, she placed both of her hands on his and smiled up at him. “Perfect.”

To an outsider it would have appeared to be a very simple moment; it shouldn’t have meant as much as it did. To the people in that room, it meant everything. They felt it in the air around them; they felt it in each other. It was peace.
justme_jp3
Excellent scene! Could see it...hear it...you captured them all so well, and pulled the threads of the story together, dealing wonderfully with the Myles and Tara's emotions at facing D and Sue. Very well done!!!
bigfan
What a great post...what an excellent way to bring closure to the emotional residue that was still hanging there.

I am awed by Sue and D's ability to forgive...I knew they would but it's still a beautiful picture.

Loved M/T defining their relationship to Jack...they are so different and it is so fun to read about them. Who would have thunk it..oh, yeah, Ami would... tongue.gif and she is doing an excellent job in schooling us in the fine art of Myles and Tara.

I will be sad when this ends...you've spoiled us with your groundbreaking "short story." I'm thinking you write them just fine.
TinaLynne
I really admire how you are able to cram so many emotions into just one post. The beginning of this scene was priceless..I could just see the reactions of all three of them as Jack walked in on the pair.
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He heard a rather unladylike snort behind him. “Myles, it’s not very nice to suggest that kissing me goes against your better judgment.”

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Jack chuckled but shook his hand. “Tara, are you sure you know what you’re getting into?”

“No,” she replied brightly, “but you know me…I just love puzzles.”


laugh.gif Loved those lines from Tara! She and Myles really are a great balance, and you really show that here...

After a rather light-hearted start, you really dig deep into the emotions once they begin talking about what happened the previous night. You did an excellent job of showing the healing that needs to happen..and how it's already beginning.

Can't wait to see how you conclude this, Ami!
webgoof
hmmmm.....any chance of any explanation for the "unreals"? huh.gif
Anne
Hmmm, Rerio I don't even know where to begin! WOW for starters! I don't usually like skeeery stuff and this was really :eek jaw drops: But I just couldn't stop reading! Great writing and I just can't get over how much you got into this story! Creepy for sure. Great humor! Very insightful to the effects of hatred and predudice. Oh the warm fuzzies melting.gif and the angst, action, drama, emotions galore! What can I say bounching.gif clapping.gif angel.gif thumbsup.gif

Oh, by the way, I'm wondering about that little sleep over Jack and Sue have planned! Hint hint! rofl.gif rolleyes.gif melting.gif :whistle:
sprogpaws
*too late to add anything 'new' to the conversation, sprogpaws merely nods her head enthusiastically, in support of the wise words spoken by her friends, then shakes her head as she is overwhelmed by the realisation of just how much talent there is on the board, and how many wonderful people too*
mjasd
You know that feeling you get when you finish a really great book. How you hold the book to your chest as you stare out the window savoring the last of the emotional roller coaster the story took you on. A soft smile plays on your lips as you inhale the rustic aroma of the book that you regretfully remove from your chest and place on the side table. You know how a really great book stays with you and sneaks up and surprises your thoughts for days afterwards, bringing a sudden laugh, quick tears, gentle smiles or warm sighs. I love that feeling. It sets everything right in your life and you feel fulfilled and ready to face the ordinary cycles of day to day living.

Your stories do that for me. And, while your story has left me jumping at shadows and wary of strangers, blonde strangers, at my door, I cling to it, inhaling its enticing aromas, hating to let go but knowing that the end is coming soon. Wouldn't be great to find a book that never ended. That kept you transfixed forever, unable to put it down for any length of time, always there waiting like a good friend. You could write one of those books.

Okay, enough mush just one final accolade- clapping.gif
webgoof
eek.gif that was the end?!?

more? somewere? :whistle:
TinaLynne
Of course there's more!! We allowed her a day off for good behaviour huh.gif ...and of course, to celebrate her birthday...more soon please, Ami!!
webgoof
PHEW!! i was worried!
rerio
Here it is, the final post. Thanks to everyone for reading and responding with such wonderful comments! Pam, thanks so much for coming up with a great idea! This challenge really helped me grow as a writer, and even though I found the subject matter difficult at times, I'm very proud of the end result. And thanks again to the best beta in the world, Tina. angel.gif

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One week later…

Ted Garrett studied the case file in front of him. “Two hundred and fourteen people dead, burned to death in a manner that is completely inexplicable to the medical examiner. Two hundred and fourteen people, but as far as we can tell none of the members of the inner circle are accounted for.”

Jack shook his head soberly. Unless the “inner circle”, as Tara called them, had moved at the last moment to mingle with the crowd, they hadn’t been in the room after the fire was extinguished. Adding to the unusual circumstances surrounding that night, there was an unexplained clearing on the floor in the center of the room. Major parts of the warehouse had been damaged; the room itself was destroyed beyond recognition. In the middle of all that devastation lay a perfectly clean circle of bare floor, a circle that Sue was almost positive matched the size of the circle she and Tara had escaped from on that terrible night.

Ted turned a few pages of the report and then looked at Jack. “Even if the events described on this paper were scientifically possible, it doesn’t make any sense. Why would aliens or demons or some kind of horrific higher power care about the creation of an Aryan race? Why target such a small part of society? For that matter, why not wipe out society as we know it all together? From the wording of this report, they certainly have the power to do just that.” He pushed the document away. “I can’t accept this statement the way it’s written.”

“That’s what they saw,” Jack said coolly.

“With all due respect to Agent Williams, she was very ill that night and can’t be expected to give an accurate report.” Ted countered. “It will end up being Thomas’ word alone. Do you really want to submit her to that kind of scrutiny, that kind of ridicule?”

“There were other things,” Jack insisted. “D’s illness, my illness, the influence that the group appeared to have had on Williams and Leland–”

Garrett shook his head firmly. “Don’t bring that up unless you want two of your agents charged with misconduct.”

Jack stared at him, frustrated. “Thomas is on my team because she sees things nobody else can. I literally stake my life everyday on the accuracy of what she reports. Now you’re telling me that we can’t trust an eyewitness account from the one person most qualified to give it.”

“Jack…” Ted’s voice was tired. “Do you remember Halloween night, when I brought you in here and asked a lot of probing questions?”

Unsure of where this was headed, Jack’s reply was cautious. “It was the night you first briefed me on this case.”

Garrett smiled humorlessly. “I didn’t want to assign this to you, but I had no choice. The decision was made for me. Think about it, Jack. By the time I talked to you that night, Janelle Montgomery had met with White Collar, and Drake Mitchell’s name was already making waves throughout the building. The FBI had dealt with Mitchell and LPT before, and each attempt ended in embarrassment and negative publicity for our side. Somebody wanted to make sure that this time the black mark went against your team.”

Jack’s eyes flashed. “Who?”

“I don’t know. I really don’t,” he insisted when Jack started to argue. “By the time I got the order, it had already passed through several levels of management. Jack, you know that there’s a lot of jealousy concerning your team. You have a reputation for hard work and a great solve record; some people can’t handle the perceived competition. Add to that the fact that you have an outstanding female agent on staff and then Thomas…one of the most unusual employment decisions ever made by a team leader in the Bureau. The FBI is old fashioned; you know that. A lot of people aren’t happy with the new company image you’re trying to create.”

Jack looked at him with disgust. “Apparently I didn’t have to go undercover to find rampant prejudice; it’s alive and well right here in the Hoover building.”

“You don’t have to tell me that,” Ted reminded him gently.

He had the good grace to feel ashamed. “No sir, I don’t. I apologize.” He thought for a moment before speaking. “I won’t do it. I believe in my people, and I won’t back down from what we saw out there just because it doesn’t make sense. The report stands.”

For just a moment genuine approval shone from Garrett’s eyes, but then he sighed. “Think about what you’re doing, Jack. Those questions I asked you on Halloween night…there are a lot of people above me who are interested in the answers. They’d also love to find dirt on you, anything they can use to make you look bad. Give them a reason, and they’ll tear you apart. Think of your team.”

Jack wanted to shrug off the warning, but he couldn’t. He thought of Bobby, faithfully attending Gambler’s Anonymous each week. D and Donna were still recovering from the loss of their baby, and D might be up for supervisor soon. His family couldn’t handle the stress of a slanderous investigation, and neither could his career. Myles would probably take some heat over the incident with his sister. The others would all get caught up in the mess, as well, and Jack could think of some very personal relationships that didn’t need the kind of exposure Garrett was describing.

He sighed, conceding defeat. “My people have to be safe or there’s no deal. No questions, no background investigations of any kind.”

“Within reason,” Garrett agreed. When Jack started to protest, Ted held up his hand. “I think I know what elements you’re concerned about. I’ll personally see to the protection of the team. Don’t push your luck, though.”

Jack felt almost sick with depression, wondering if he’d just sacrificed his chance of happiness with Sue. He couldn’t even think of how to explain this to her…or to Myles and Tara. Still, there was no choice. He couldn’t allow any of them to become targets for a witch-hunt. “I understand.” he said dismally.

Garrett wasn’t finished. “I’m not sure you do. Jack, I’m telling you that your agent’s personal histories are safe with me…and so are their personal lives.”

He was almost afraid to hope. “Does that mean…”

Ted was looking at him, his eyes compelling him to understand. “There are rules, and then there are people. Myles seems to be much happier these days, doesn’t he?”

Jack nodded, not quite able to control his relief. “He does.”

“Glad to hear it. Whatever you’re doing, keep it up. And if you have a problem or you reach a point where a more permanent arrangement needs to be made, come see me.” Garrett had stopped watching him and was carefully rearranging papers on his desk.

Jack felt as if his heart was about to fly out of his chest. “I will. I’ll have my new report for you by this afternoon, and thank you.” He stood to leave.

When he reached the door, Ted stopped him again. “Jack?”

He turned around. “Yes, sir?”

“You think they’re still out there, don’t you?”

Jack looked at him, but he was seeing again the destruction of that horrible night and the fiery, angelic beauty of the woman he loved more than life itself. “Yes.” And God help us all.

***

Somewhere in North America
Six months later


“Michael! It’s gorgeous!” The stunning Asian woman held up her hand to look at the engagement ring more closely.

“Not half as beautiful as my future wife,” the man standing beside her replied.

She beamed up at him. “Oh, you.”

He kissed her. “I love you.”

Her eyes filled with tears. “I love you, too.”

He gently brushed her hair away from her face. “Let’s go get something to eat while we decide how to tell everyone.”

“Yes! And we can make wedding plans…lots of plans,” she teased.

He groaned. “I thought my job was just to show up at the appropriate time?”

“Oh no,” she protested. “You’re in this for the long haul, buddy.” Laughing, she looped her arm through his as they walked away, happily discussing their future together. Neither of them noticed the man who watched from across the street, the blond man with the perfectly blue, curiously empty eyes.

It begins.

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justme_jp3
Fabulous story, Ami! Brilliant plotline and perfect ending! Worth every minute of torment our favorite characters gave you! LOL

Standing ovation: clapping.gif clapping.gif clapping.gif clapping.gif clapping.gif clapping.gif clapping.gif
ladynightingale
Very X-Files ending. biggrin.gif So are these guys ever going to make an appearance in another of your stories? Awesome job. wave.gif
LizzyM87
Wow, fantastic job, rerio!! I'm just sad that it's over! You definitely left lots of room for more, if you wanted to continue it. But, there's still enough closure to let it stand on its own. You did a splendid job of keeping a balance, and tackling a hard subject: prejudice... and inter-office relationships too. Wonderful work!!
sprogpaws
Ami, I am completely awe-struck. That was .... amazing! You pulled together every single little piece into one superb conclusion and I am just sitting here, staggered, with my mouth hanging open in admiration. I wish I could find the words to express just how impressed I am, or how grateful - thank you so very, very much.

I'll shut up now before I make a complete idiot of myself scrambling around for superlatives, and instead I throw myself prone at your feet in worship, 'cos I think I found me a new religion!
Kav
What a great story!!! Really different and spooky and the ending was eerily supberb. I bet we'll see those bad guys in another one of your fics sometime -- out for revenge against poor Sue? I've been trying to keep caugt up with just the Halloween fics and I am truly amazed at the depth of talent that's here! Thanks for the great writing!
Kav
bigfan
Oh my, what an excellent conclusion...loved the dialogue between Garrett and Jack and their compromise and understanding...and then...and then...

I am left with chills...

Sidenote: Why do I think that was intentional... mad.gif

Seriously, absolutely brilliant, Rerio. Keep the short stories going...you are a master.
Anne
Rerio this story was really amazing! I loved the ending. Mostly the conversation between Jack and Garrett was so intense. Having to make a decision between integrity for the truth and reality of consequences for those you love. I do love how you wrote it and I like Jack going from depression to his heart coming out of his chest! angel.gif The end creeped me out but that's me. It was a great ending.
Smiler
Everyone else has beat me to the good comments so all i'm going to say is:

FANTASTIC!!!!

and

THANK YOU!!!
TinaLynne
What a great, creepy, X-Files-like ending. You leave the true identity of the aliens/demons a complete mystery, forcing the reader to draw their own conclusions. I liked the way you left the J/S, M/T relationships, so that we know that they have a chance--it was looking a bit doubtful for a moment there!

This story was so wonderful, Ami! It had so many elements woven together flawlessly--it was an absolute pleasure to read. You are a true talent who never, ever disappoints. Can't wait to see what you come up with next! biggrin.gif
CMcCarrell
This Halloween story was well written, well described and well ended ;D

Great work!

Cassie
mjasd
Oh, I have such chills and they're multiplying. . . Okay, I couldn't resist throwing that in. But I really do have chills from that ending. Brrr. unsure.gif

Great Halloween story Ami.
GA fan
outstanding.gif story, rerio! I sure didn't expect that ending...and it really gave me the chills! eek.gif An appearance in another story in the future? Oh my... just give me warning, so I'll know to read it only during the daylight hours, then. wink.gif
Lucy&Bobby
JUST got to finishg reading it!!~ I don't know what else to say but wow and that I am SCARED for that poor couple at the end it is so sad!!!

LOved the M/T fuzzies..and the BANTER!! It was so "them" tongue.gif wonderful!!!
theatrenut86
applause.gif alltiedup_smilie.gif Quite the story you wrote there....I am blown away with what you did with it....Pam's ideas for the costumes were perfect and you worked with them well wink.gif
jack fan
Great job, the action defiantly kept me on the edge.
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