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That was heavenly beautiful
Kav.......I'm speechless! Wonderful!!!!Jill
QUOTE(flip @ Dec 17 2006, 12:42 PM) 
There is no way I can adequately begin to reply to all that I would like to quote.
Kav, it seems, when Jonah handcuffs you to his life and drags you along with him, it inspires you greatly. What you've done with this story - the faith and providence you have intertwined throughout are amazing. Awe seems like such a paltry emotion right now. It's not nearly expressive enough. Seems I'm speechless - and covered with chillbumps! Wow!!!!!
I have to ditto Flip, here, because I am at a loss for words to properly describe the emotions I am feeling right now. That post (and this whole story so far) was full of love, joy, faith, redemption, belief, and grace.... Beautiful. Absolutely, stunningly, and poetically beautiful! (I guess I found a few words of my own after all
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Kav, there aren't words powerful enough to express the beauty in your last post, as well as this entire story!! My heart is bursting with pride for Myles, and joy for the team and for all of us!!!
Joy
Joy
What a wonderful bunch of posts to find....
Kav... no matter what... you are AMAZING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
(there's no quota on exclaimation points is there?)
You have made my heart melt into a terrific puddle of melted joy...
**SIGH**
I don't know what else to say.... really....
except Luv you!
You have used that beautiful carol of praise, along with your portrayal of Jack's joyful heart, to spread around a lot of Christmas joy, Kav. Thank you.
oh wow.... I think it is the best post of this story...I have watery eyes and my heart is full of... joy!!! 
Fabulous. Just fabulous! That was soooo good! *swoons*
I hope you dont mind but I sang along with the post 
Now, all was beautiful. I love it. But this part touched me.. so deeply..
Joy because he could see a Divine hand in the planning and orchestrating of every path in his life. Joy because he had made enough right choices to enable himself to be so richly blessed. Joy simply because there was nothing left to feel, but joy.
.. The words you chose, they match perfectly with the feeling you had given me with the post.
QUOTE(Kav @ Dec 17 2006, 06:28 PM)
Joy because he could see a Divine hand in the planning and orchestrating of every path in his life. Joy because he had made enough right choices to enable himself to be so richly blessed. Joy simply because there was nothing left to feel, but joy.
.. The words you chose, they match perfectly with the feeling you had given me with the post.
I am weeping with tears of JOY!!!
thanks so much,
Terie
thanks so much,
Terie
What a powerful post! I am so glad to be able to come back to this after a 20 hr power outage and my internet was down for 2 days after that! I can't wait for more Kav!
Wonderful Post, I am glad that most of the team got to hear him and that they are remembering. Can't wait for more
Dianna
Dianna
I just caught up on your story. What a journey! 
I've been without computer for 15 days and I found 17 pages to read! WOW!
I don't know what to say... I wish a could write in my language so that I could explain to you how much I'm loving this story! I hate my lack of mastery of the English language!!!!
However, I loved everything of this story... Myles and Sue...Jack, Myles and Mrs. C... Bobby and Tara...
But above all I loved this last post. It was... perfect! Just...perfect!
Your talent humbles me.
Ornella
I've been without computer for 15 days and I found 17 pages to read! WOW! I don't know what to say... I wish a could write in my language so that I could explain to you how much I'm loving this story! I hate my lack of mastery of the English language!!!!
However, I loved everything of this story... Myles and Sue...Jack, Myles and Mrs. C... Bobby and Tara...
But above all I loved this last post. It was... perfect! Just...perfect!
Your talent humbles me.
Ornella
Wow, Kav. I'm speechless! Your entire story has been just amazing! Thanks so much for sharing it with us!
Kav, that was so well written I could feel the joy, the praise, the excitement. I could totally picture the whole scene and could almost here Myles voice. I even think I heard that bell. Jack and Sue 
Jack and Sue
I could hear Myles singing. I love that song - incredibly powerful scenes.
wow I drive around for a little while and I come back to 3 pages of missed posts! wow! and everyone of them better than the last. I have to say the part about Joy was so amazing! the best yet.
I am lost for words.
Jen
Jen
That was wonderful they are all begining to think about there ride from all those years back more soon please Kav
its
Lin
that was breath- taking the way you weaved ever together; love, joy, faith, the past, the present and the future
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Joy. Pure joy. That’s what Jack was feeling. Somehow, Myles had been able to translate his wordless thoughts into the kind of praise Jack felt the Creator deserved. He was filled with joy. Joy because Sue was at his side. Joy because they had at long last been able to keep their childish promises. Joy because he could see a Divine hand in the planning and orchestrating of every path in his life. Joy because he had made enough right choices to enable himself to be so richly blessed. Joy simply because there was nothing left to feel, but joy.
If words could sing out from a page, I believe that paragraph would be its own concerto. The whole thing was amazingly woven and beautifully presented, but that paragraph was a crescendo that said in words what I've felt so often, but couldn't verbalize -- the moments when I realize that my life has been in His hands and He has filled it to overflowing.
I humbly and simply say "thank you".
Wow, Kav, that was such a masterful post! It was so masterful that I'm speechless and that's bad because I want to say so much! I think I will try, though.
I swear I could hear Myles singing that song, because that is one of my favorite Christmas songs of all time, though Carol of the Bells is my most favorite to sing. I had chills running down my spine at the thought of all of them remembering everything all at once. It was all so magical!
I swear I could hear Myles singing that song, because that is one of my favorite Christmas songs of all time, though Carol of the Bells is my most favorite to sing. I had chills running down my spine at the thought of all of them remembering everything all at once. It was all so magical!
Wow Kav! That was absolutely amazing!!!!
Thank you
Em
Thank you
Em
That was just outstanding, Kav. Simply outstanding. I dont think there are words to describe the emotions I felt while I read that post. You picked the perfect words in the perfect order to create... a masterpiece. That's all it is, a master piece.
That was an inspiring post, but I don't expect any less from you!
That was an inspiring post, but I don't expect any less from you!
Sorry, this one really is a snippet and it looks like this is all I'll manage today! 
Thanks for all your great comments -- y'all buoy me up and I really appreciate it!
He wasn’t sure how it happened. One minute the ring was resting securely in his jacket pocket and the next moment Jack found himself sliding it onto Sue’s finger without ever uttering a word.
Myles swore afterwards that Jack made his move to the accompaniment of the soprano section trilling five gold rings from The Twelve Days of Christmas.
Jack denied this but truthfully he was so besotted that he wouldn’t have noticed if the Polar Express itself rattled in through the church doors. What he did notice was Sue’s frozen silence and the audible gasps and ensuing twittering from the people around them – in particular, the two ladies who had graciously allowed him to slip into the seat beside Sue. Obviously they had done their own maneuvering and managed to procure seating directly behind Jack and Sue. He heard their staged whispers and was grateful that Sue could not.
“Did he even ask her?”
“I don’t think so…”
“You mean he just…”
“…assumes…”
“that she’ll say yes!”
“Well, look at him, wouldn’t you?”
“Still, I wouldn’t like to think that he’d just take her for granted…”
As if that could ever be a possibility, Jack scoffed silently as he continued to stare at the golden head bent over her extended hand. He hoped this was because her attention was drawn to the ring he had just placed there and not because she was so mortified that she was afraid to look up at him. The ladies’ comments had scared him.
Myles figured they’d counted all the way up to seven swans a swimming before Sue finally lifted her head. He was relieved since holding his breath and singing was next to impossible and the choir director was giving him curious looks. He didn’t realize how worried he was until he took one look at her face and felt the release of tension send his voice warbling out of control. From the smug look on Jack’s face, Myles figured the man had his answer, whether Sue had actually given him one or not.
“Say yes,” Jack mouthed when she finally looked over at him.
“I’m sorry, Jack, I didn’t hear the question,” she teased.
“Say yes and I’ll tell you what you’re agreeing to,” he insisted with the air of a man who was certain of the outcome.
Sue tilted her head in playful consideration, unaware of the avid audience watching the scene unfold before them. She felt the unfamiliar pressure of the ring encircling her finger – a ring so exquisite that she had been stunned more by it than his unexpected proposal. She shivered when he placed his hand over hers, lifting it to his lips. His mouth grazed her knuckles and she jumped when his tongue traced the gold band encircling her finger. She snatched her hand away, her cheeks aflame, her eyes wide in disbelief. Suddenly aware of the eavesdroppers around her she hastily tucked her hand into her lap, her cheeks flagging her embarrassment…and excitement.
He knew he could kiss that yes out of her if they were alone and was beginning to seriously calculate that option regardless of their numerous witnesses. She was making him wait far too long, but he supposed that could rightfully be her line since he had made her wait two years; an eternity when he thought of what they had been missing. Now he didn’t want to waste another second.
Marry me. He signed and then bent closer to her. “Say yes and I’ll spend the rest of the day convincing you that it was the best decision you ever made. And Sue, you know I can be very...convincing.” He accompanied this comment with a wink.
Energy surged between them and Sue felt the familiar curls of heat flickering through her body. His eyes were impossible! They spoke the volumes he didn’t dare put to voice in the midst of the church. They sparkled nearly as brightly as the diamond on her left hand which glistened in the sunlight straining in through the leaded glass of an arched window. It was impossibly delicate, so intricate that she feared it would shatter with the slightest movement. It reminded her of the rainbow of colours caught in the icicle prisms that lined the path to…her breath caught in the back of her throat as she looked at him in surprise. Chocolate eyes warmed her with their gaze, steadying her and exciting her all at the same time. Familiar eyes that had held her just as captive then as they did now.
“Jack?” she whispered her surprise. “Do you remember…”
“Yes,” he nodded with a glint of amusement evident in his eye. “See how easy that was to say? Now you try it.” He thought it impossible for her to look any lovelier, but the radiance that burst across her countenance left him gasping for air. The look she sent him was as intimate as any touch and her eyes held promises he had barely begun to dream of.
“Yes.”
Myles thought it was lucky that Jack’s whoop of joy echoed through the church just as the choir energetically began their countdown from eleven pipers piping. The rest of the choir thought it odd that the smattering of applause began well before the familiar carol was finished but Myles could see the small standing ovation that circled Jack and Sue, neatly obscuring them from sight. When the ushers had restored order again, he noticed the empty gap in the pew and the lovebirds’ suspicious absence from the grand finale of his choral debut.
Thanks for all your great comments -- y'all buoy me up and I really appreciate it! He wasn’t sure how it happened. One minute the ring was resting securely in his jacket pocket and the next moment Jack found himself sliding it onto Sue’s finger without ever uttering a word.
Myles swore afterwards that Jack made his move to the accompaniment of the soprano section trilling five gold rings from The Twelve Days of Christmas.
Jack denied this but truthfully he was so besotted that he wouldn’t have noticed if the Polar Express itself rattled in through the church doors. What he did notice was Sue’s frozen silence and the audible gasps and ensuing twittering from the people around them – in particular, the two ladies who had graciously allowed him to slip into the seat beside Sue. Obviously they had done their own maneuvering and managed to procure seating directly behind Jack and Sue. He heard their staged whispers and was grateful that Sue could not.
“Did he even ask her?”
“I don’t think so…”
“You mean he just…”
“…assumes…”
“that she’ll say yes!”
“Well, look at him, wouldn’t you?”
“Still, I wouldn’t like to think that he’d just take her for granted…”
As if that could ever be a possibility, Jack scoffed silently as he continued to stare at the golden head bent over her extended hand. He hoped this was because her attention was drawn to the ring he had just placed there and not because she was so mortified that she was afraid to look up at him. The ladies’ comments had scared him.
Myles figured they’d counted all the way up to seven swans a swimming before Sue finally lifted her head. He was relieved since holding his breath and singing was next to impossible and the choir director was giving him curious looks. He didn’t realize how worried he was until he took one look at her face and felt the release of tension send his voice warbling out of control. From the smug look on Jack’s face, Myles figured the man had his answer, whether Sue had actually given him one or not.
“Say yes,” Jack mouthed when she finally looked over at him.
“I’m sorry, Jack, I didn’t hear the question,” she teased.
“Say yes and I’ll tell you what you’re agreeing to,” he insisted with the air of a man who was certain of the outcome.
Sue tilted her head in playful consideration, unaware of the avid audience watching the scene unfold before them. She felt the unfamiliar pressure of the ring encircling her finger – a ring so exquisite that she had been stunned more by it than his unexpected proposal. She shivered when he placed his hand over hers, lifting it to his lips. His mouth grazed her knuckles and she jumped when his tongue traced the gold band encircling her finger. She snatched her hand away, her cheeks aflame, her eyes wide in disbelief. Suddenly aware of the eavesdroppers around her she hastily tucked her hand into her lap, her cheeks flagging her embarrassment…and excitement.
He knew he could kiss that yes out of her if they were alone and was beginning to seriously calculate that option regardless of their numerous witnesses. She was making him wait far too long, but he supposed that could rightfully be her line since he had made her wait two years; an eternity when he thought of what they had been missing. Now he didn’t want to waste another second.
Marry me. He signed and then bent closer to her. “Say yes and I’ll spend the rest of the day convincing you that it was the best decision you ever made. And Sue, you know I can be very...convincing.” He accompanied this comment with a wink.
Energy surged between them and Sue felt the familiar curls of heat flickering through her body. His eyes were impossible! They spoke the volumes he didn’t dare put to voice in the midst of the church. They sparkled nearly as brightly as the diamond on her left hand which glistened in the sunlight straining in through the leaded glass of an arched window. It was impossibly delicate, so intricate that she feared it would shatter with the slightest movement. It reminded her of the rainbow of colours caught in the icicle prisms that lined the path to…her breath caught in the back of her throat as she looked at him in surprise. Chocolate eyes warmed her with their gaze, steadying her and exciting her all at the same time. Familiar eyes that had held her just as captive then as they did now.
“Jack?” she whispered her surprise. “Do you remember…”
“Yes,” he nodded with a glint of amusement evident in his eye. “See how easy that was to say? Now you try it.” He thought it impossible for her to look any lovelier, but the radiance that burst across her countenance left him gasping for air. The look she sent him was as intimate as any touch and her eyes held promises he had barely begun to dream of.
“Yes.”
Myles thought it was lucky that Jack’s whoop of joy echoed through the church just as the choir energetically began their countdown from eleven pipers piping. The rest of the choir thought it odd that the smattering of applause began well before the familiar carol was finished but Myles could see the small standing ovation that circled Jack and Sue, neatly obscuring them from sight. When the ushers had restored order again, he noticed the empty gap in the pew and the lovebirds’ suspicious absence from the grand finale of his choral debut.
I was holding my breath too !!!! That was amazing. Somehow I'm sure Myles will forgive Sue for leaving before the final applause!!!
Kav,
This story is beautiful. You had me in tears with the post where Myles was singing his solo. I could feel the power in his voice as I read the lyrics to the song. O Come All ye Faithful is one of my favourite Christmas Carols. You have been gifted with the ability to write and move people with that writing. There really are not enough words to describe how wonderful it is. I eagerly await the rest of the story.
Melissa
This story is beautiful. You had me in tears with the post where Myles was singing his solo. I could feel the power in his voice as I read the lyrics to the song. O Come All ye Faithful is one of my favourite Christmas Carols. You have been gifted with the ability to write and move people with that writing. There really are not enough words to describe how wonderful it is. I eagerly await the rest of the story.
Melissa
YAY...now we have a wedding....
~laura michelle~
~laura michelle~
Poor Myles - trying to hold his breath and sing at the same time!!!
But was there really any doubt?? I don't think so!!!
Beautifully orchestrated, Kav!! I can see it all happening and hear Jack's whoop of Joy!! As all of this story has been - purely magic!!!
Joy
But was there really any doubt?? I don't think so!!!
Beautifully orchestrated, Kav!! I can see it all happening and hear Jack's whoop of Joy!! As all of this story has been - purely magic!!!
Joy
QUOTE(Kav @ Dec 18 2006, 08:07 PM)
Myles thought it was lucky that Jack’s whoop of joy echoed through the church just as the choir energetically began their countdown from eleven pipers piping. The rest of the choir thought it odd that the smattering of applause began well before the familiar carol was finished but Myles could see the small standing ovation that circled Jack and Sue, neatly obscuring them from sight. When the ushers had restored order again, he noticed the empty gap in the pew and the lovebirds’ suspicious absence from the grand finale of his choral debut.
She said YES!!!! I loved Jack whooping. I have to admit, I was whooping right along with him. Those poor ushers. They sometimes have the toughest job in the church! Kim
A BIG ditto to that Kim!
Can't wait for more Kav!!
BLT
Can't wait for more Kav!!
BLT
what else is there to say?
This was great!
That was just so lovely!
Funny. I could just picture their confusion.
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The rest of the choir thought it odd that the smattering of applause began well before the familiar carol was finished ......
Funny. I could just picture their confusion.
i think that sums it up
cath
I was laughing, and then I'm off in a coughing fit! Drat this cough!! Kav, your fabby post has helped my coldy-cough feel better!!
Jen
Jen
Awesome, Kay! I am so happy! Now I can go to work with a really glad heart and eagerly await your next post! 
Donna
Donna
I tried to read this three times last night and every time I logged on, my husband needed the computer for some inane reason. I kept thinking "but Jack's proposing! Whatever you need the computer for cannot be as important as that!"
So finally, here I am.
Most wonderful proposal. Tense and beautiful with Myles watching all the while. The ladies talking was a great extra touch.
So finally, here I am.
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“Jack?” she whispered her surprise. “Do you remember…”
“Yes,” he nodded with a glint of amusement evident in his eye. “See how easy that was to say? Now you try it.” He thought it impossible for her to look any lovelier, but the radiance that burst across her countenance left him gasping for air. The look she sent him was as intimate as any touch and her eyes held promises he had barely begun to dream of.
The "Do you remember . . ." sent shivers through me. What perfect timing!“Yes,” he nodded with a glint of amusement evident in his eye. “See how easy that was to say? Now you try it.” He thought it impossible for her to look any lovelier, but the radiance that burst across her countenance left him gasping for air. The look she sent him was as intimate as any touch and her eyes held promises he had barely begun to dream of.
Most wonderful proposal. Tense and beautiful with Myles watching all the while. The ladies talking was a great extra touch.
amazing
You brought this all together so beautifully; the richness of Myles' voice fillling the church, Jack placing the diamond on Sue's finger, her gentle response, the people nearby observing, Sue remembering Chocolate, and finally Jack's whoop of joy. Wonderful.
that was wonderfulKav more soon please Lin
Oh, Kav, such a wonderful "snippet" (how you can call that a snippet is beyond me, though). You had my heart melting more and more at every word until I turned out like this ---> .
I'm so happy that they all remember now and I loved the way Jack proposed. He was right though when he said Sue was making him wait. He did deserve it. That's what he got for making her wait for him to make a move for so long.
. I'm so happy that they all remember now and I loved the way Jack proposed. He was right though when he said Sue was making him wait. He did deserve it. That's what he got for making her wait for him to make a move for so long.
KAV!!! lovely....
and how thoughtful of Jack to realize they shouldn't make out completely in the middle of church....
at least...
not until the wedding....
you're so brilliant...
now get moving and write me more Bobby and Tara!!!!!!
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*happy sigh*
Beautiful, amazing, wonderful, PERFECT!!!
Beautiful, amazing, wonderful, PERFECT!!!
Woo Hoo!!!!!! Em
Wonderful! Absolutely wonderful! I'm sure Myles will forgive them for having left the church so soon.
Ornella
Absolutely wonderful! I'm sure Myles will forgive them for having left the church so soon. Ornella
That was just.... breathtaking. In every sense of the word!
So romantic!!!! Now where did they run off to?
o wow o wow i'm so giddy i feel like a school girl. o wow she said yes...could she say anything other then yes....o wow there getting married
o wow i'm so giddy i feel like a school girl. o wow she said yes...could she say anything other then yes....o wow there getting married
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