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MissMusketeer
Well I just wanted to let everyone know that this short story, was just a crazy idea that came to me. I hope you all enjoy it and would great appreciate reviews of what you think. invisible.gif I'll just be hiding...
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The bright leaves fell around Sue as she sat on a bench in front of her husband’s grave. Surrounded by bunches of different flowers from the many visitors. Sue before sitting down had placed a single red rose and one white daisy amongst the others, “I miss you.” She signed and spoke. Tracing the letters on the stone, Jackson Samuel Hudson, son, friend, husband. They had been married 3 wonderful years, before he was shot and killed during a raid gone wrong. Though the men had be caught, that knowledge didn’t ease the pain of this anniversary. Sue later had father added on to the headstone. When God took her husband, He gave her life, 9 months later. That first year the team had been so supportive, it was the hardest year of Sue’s life. She was going to have to raise the baby on her own, or so she thought. Their baby had so many loving “Aunts” and “Uncles” who care. Lucy had come to live with her the first few months after the baby had been born being the best friend and support she needed. As time went on things became a bit easier.

Now five year old Jaclyn Samantha Hudson, the spitting image of her father, sat in her mothers arms as she heard and saw her mother sign the story of her daddy. Mommy had shown her all the pictures of him so she knew how to imagine him. They had the same color hair and big brown eyes that Uncle Bobby said got her out of any trouble. When they first came to the cemetery mommy put down a red flower and white daisy, her favorite flower. Mommy had explained that the red rose was from her to show daddy she loved him and the white one was from me, his little girl. As the story about her dad came to an end Jackie got down and said “I’m going to go say bye to daddy.” “Okay sweetheart.” Sue replied.

Running over the little girl lay down in the grass where her father lay, arms spread as if she were hugging the world. At that moment the wind picked up and Sue felt the cool autumn breeze against her face. When it died down her daughter came back and took her hand. “I said bye to daddy and said we’d come back to visit. He told me he loved us and was waitin’ for you in heaven.” Sue looked down at Jackie and smiled, tears glistening in her eyes. At first she had been filled with sorrow at the thought that Jaclyn would never know her father, never have him pick her up from school, teach her how to drive or walk her down the aisle when she got married, but at this moment she realized that Jack would always be with them and always be remembered. Her and Jack’s love had produced a beautiful daughter and she was blessed to have her. “You know, dad is looking out for you from heaven and will be with you no matter what.” “Yes,” Jackie replied. “That’s why he told me to be a good girl or else he’d tell you.” The little girl added. Sue grinned up at the sky knowing her love was grinning back. Mother and daughter made their way to the car. With a final look back Sue whispered “I love you Jack and I always will.” The wind picked up again and blew against their faces the lightest of kisses. Daddy was watching over them.


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MissMusketeer
fixed the format! sad.gif ....
Frwdgranny
Although I do not like to have a character death, this was a beautiful story MM. I am glad you finished it in one post, though. And, as much as we don't want this to happen, it is a real possiblity, given their dangerous line of work. You handled it in a very delicate, touching way and the love between Sue and Jaclyn shines here, as well as the love between Sue and Jack.

You ended it wonderfully:
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“You know, dad is looking out for you from heaven and will be with you no matter what.” “Yes,” Jackie replied. “That’s why he told me to be a good girl or else he’d tell you.” The little girl added. Sue grinned up at the sky knowing her love was grinning back. Mother and daughter made their way to the car. With a final look back Sue whispered “I love you Jack and I always will.” The wind picked up again and blew against their faces the lightest of kisses. Daddy was watching over them.
Supurb job! clapping.gif Flowers.gif

Lynn

PS. Oh, you fixed the format. It does read better..I like the italics on the headstone.

learningtosign
beautiful but very sad

cath
maria2202
This was very powerful and beautiful...even though Jack had died it was still very very moving...I loved it. You had me in tears crying.gif
Kav
And she named the baby after Jack! Very sad, but you captured the somber mood perfectly.

kav
Cere Cere
crying.gif crying.gif

So sad and at the same time so beautiful!!

Congratulation!!

Tere
jack fan
That was beautiful! I was crying through out the whole story.
marlo29
So touching!!!
AuereusUna
Very nicely written!

Very sad and, having written a character death story myself, I know it was hard to kill off a character we know and love so much

Brava! clapgirl.gif
Linny27
crying.gif Oh, so emotional. This is something most of us don't like to think about and only a few of us can write it so poignantly. You've done wonderfully with this. It does my heart good to know that Jack is still watching over them. crying.gif
Oreolover
While the subject was extremely sad, you wrote the emotions involved beautifully. It was very touching.
Sairs
A very sad but beautiful story.

Sairs
afanfromSicily
So sad and so beautiful... applause.gif
Wonderful job.

Ornella
Blueangel
i was very interested in seeing what character you used for this story. i had a feeling it was going to be a sue and jack thing.
lovely story. really sweet.
suesfan
Even though this is very sad, it is beautifully written. You managed to make me feel that Jack was right there with them, looking after his girls!!!

Thanks for sharing!!!

Joy
Rosa17
Very powerful piece, I am glad you chose to share it with us smile.gif
theme
I'm ill and reading story where Jack's dead, made the illness even worse, but I think it was described really gooooood...(sorry, we rate some things in school these past 2 days, so that's why I have thoughts like this... batting eyelashes.gif )
australiagirl
I had a lump form the size of an apple reading that.

Thanks for sharing!!!!
Josy
crying.gif So sad but so beautiful...
Josy
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