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Cere Cere
Hi there!! This is my first attempt for writing a fanfic, well at least the first that I published blush.gif, hope you liked and I apologize in advance for the language, English is not my mother tongue eeyore.gif.
It is a songfic, the song is called 'Enséñame' (Teach Me) and it's sang by mexican singer Emmanuel.
This is a General fic, but if moderators think that should be another rating, I would change it gladly
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Well, without further comments, here we go!
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I was driving to my childhood home in Wisconsin for a family reunion. All is red, the beautiful color of the leaves is in all the road in my old town. I know, I’m late, seems that the crime wouldn’t have a holiday…so I had to work in a serious and important case, now it’s closed and I can see them again!... My family was here on time for the reunion, since my wife is only working at the house, she and the kids could fly here last week.
Oh…boy…! I’m yearning for see them again, it’s about 7 or 8 days since the last time I hugged them and I miss them a lot…



Enséñame, enséñame- TEACH ME, TEACH ME

A ser feliz como lo eres tú - TO BE HAPPY, LIKE YOU ARE

A dar amor como lo das tú, - TO GIVE LOVE TO ALL, LIKE YOU DO

A perdonar como perdonas tú - TO FORGIVE ANYONE, LIKE YOU DO

Sin recordar el daño nunca más, nunca más - WITHOUT REMEMBERING THE OFFENSE, EVER, EVER...



Arriving to my parents’ house driveway, at the front yard I can see a golden dog waving his tail, happy to see me…, uh…think not. Now that I can watch the beautiful picture in front of my eyes, I clearly observe why Levi is so happy. He is playing with three people, two blonde girls and a brown hair boy. Man! They are having the fun of their life, having joy with that wonderful red leaves at the grass.



Enséñame, enséñame - TEACH ME, TEACH ME

A consolar como consuelas tú - TO COMFORT EVERYONE, LIKE YOU DO

A confiar como confías tú - TO HAVE FAITH, LIKE YOU HAVE

A repartir sonrisas como tú - TO SPREAD SMILES TO ALL, LIKE YOU DO

Sin esperar nada a cambio, nada más - WITHOUT WAITING FOR SOME REWARD, EVER



The little ones are like in a game, competing for whom of them can put on more leaves in their mom head…and body so to speak. My wife is there sitting on the lawn full of red leaves and laughing at our kids antics, she can’t hear their laughing but she can see it and enjoy herself with the kids’ little amusement. I have to suppress my own laugh, if I want to see them for a little more time without get their attention.



Tengo mucho que aprender de ti, amor - I HAVE A LOT TO LEARN FROM YOU, MY LOVE

Tengo mucho que aprender de ti, amor - I HAVE A LOT TO LEARN FROM YOU, MY LOVE

Tu dulzura y fortaleza, - YOUR SWEETNESS AND STRENGHT

Tu manera de entregarte - YOUR WAY OF GIVING YOURSELF TO ALL

Tu tesón por conquistarme cada día. - YOUR TENACITY FOR EARN MY HEART EVERY DAY



Tengo mucho que aprender de ti, amor - I HAVE A LOT TO LEARN FROM YOU, MY LOVE

Tengo mucho que aprender de ti, amor - I HAVE A LOT TO LERAN FROM YOU, MY LOVE

Como olvidas los enfados - HOW YOU FORGET THE ANNOYANCE

Como cumples las promesas - HOW YOU KEEP YOUR PROMISES

Como guías nuestros pasos cada día - HOW YOU GUIDE OURS STEPS EVERY DAY



That single little moment watching Sue, Sam my sweet five year old boy and Lizzy my cute three year old little girl, made me remember that fateful day when I met their mother, when I learn that she is deaf, but most of it, that She is a tough, sweet, kind, wonderful and beautiful human being. Despite Myles’ not so welcome to the team, Sue didn’t keep any bitterness at him, on the contrary she spoke to Ted in Myles favor, among other things... I remembered then all the people that she’d helped in all these years without expecting any reward…



Enséñame, enséñame - TEACH ME, TEACH ME

A no mentir, como no mientes tú - TO DON'T LIE, LIKE YOU DO

A no envidiar como no envidias tú - TO DON'N ENVY, LIKE YOU DO

A no ahogar las penas como lo haces tú - TO DON'T LET PAIN GET THROUGH US, LIKE YOU DO

A compartir la dicha como tú - TO SHARE HAPPINESS, LIKE YOU DO



I can see my mom and dad watching them from the living room window and they’re too mesmerizing at the vision. Now Levi is helping Sam and Lizzy in their task meanwhile Sue is trying to put some leaves on our kids too, that image will be in my memory for all my life. No matter how much time I’ll be here on Earth, I will always thank God for give me such a life companion, who teach me how to live.



Tengo mucho que aprender de ti, amor - I HAVE A LOT TO LEARN FROM YOU, MY LOVE

Tengo mucho que aprender de ti, amor - I HAVE A LOT TO LEARN FROM YOU, MY LOVE

Tu dulzura y fortaleza, - YOUR SWEETNESS AND STRENGHT

Tu manera de entregarte - YOUR WAY OF GIVING YOURSELF TO ALL

Tu tesón por conquistarme cada día. - YOUR TENACITY FOR EARN MY HEART EVERY DAY



Suddenly and without know what’s going on, I feel that something is pushing me down and then all was red and I could hear some giggles and laughing from behind. My kids are welcoming me to our little family reunion and give me the same treatment than their mother. Now I couldn’t stop laughing, Sue is lending Sam and Lizzy a hand, I can’t got waste the opportunity and grab her bringing down with me meanwhile the kids are playing with the dog – ‘Welcome home darling!’ – She said and we kissed.



Tengo mucho que aprender de ti, amor - I HAVE A LOT TO LEARN FROM YOU, MY LOVE

Tengo mucho que aprender de ti, amor - I HAVE A LOT TO LERAN FROM YOU, MY LOVE

Como olvidas los enfados - HOW YOU FORGET THE ANNOYANCE

Como cumples las promesas - HOW YOU KEEP YOUR PROMISES

Como guías nuestros pasos cada día - HOW YOU GUIDE OURS STEPS EVERY DAY



Now that the little angels are peacefully asleep with Levi in my old room, my exquisite wife and I walked slowly to the guest room. Getting ready for bed and waiting for her to look at me I signed and spoke – ‘Thanks so much sweetheart!’‘What for, dear?’ – She responds. – ‘For be a teacher for me all these years, without you I would be a null and void person. LOVE YOU’ – I hug and kiss her. After some time I heard – ‘You are my teacher too Jack, LOVE YOU SAME!!’ – After another few kisses we fall asleep in each others arms. I’m smiling contently. I couldn’t ask for more.
FIN



Word count: 661 words

Thanks so much for reading! I offer my gratitude to Kaci (theatrenut86) and Averil for their words of exhort! blowkiss.gif

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Tere
Josy
Oh how sweet and lovely JC_cupidgirl.gif
I loved how your pictured that familial scene.
I am eager to read the english version of the song
Bravo and thanks for sharing that first fic with us blowkiss.gif
Josy
sbfisher
autumn.gif That was a wonderful glimpse into the future of Jack and Sue. I could actually see them playing in the leaves! Good job!
Cere Cere
I put the translation in the story, side by side, that way you can see the meaning meanwhile you're reading book.gif

Hope you have enjoyed! autumn.gif

Tere
scottiedog
autumn.gif A beautiful look into the future of very happy and loving Hudson family!

Good Job! clapping.gif
Kav
Tere -- that was fantastic! And the song definitely fits Jack and Sue. I loved the images you created of him hurrying home and finding his wife and children playing the leaves. Your story has out a smile on my face.

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Josy
I just loved the lyrics of the song...fit Jack and Sue so perfectly autumn.gif
Josy
theatrenut86
That was wonderful Tere! JC_cupidgirl.gif autumn.gif

And your dedication was partly to me! blush.gif
suesfan
Tere, what a wonderful start to your fanfic writing!! You captured the picture you chose perfectly!! Your descriptions are as clear and as crisp as the breeze felt by Jack, Sue, their children and Levi, as they play in the fall leaves!! Such love and happiness!!!

Thanks for sharing!!

Joy
Frwdgranny


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Tere - What a beautiful portrait you have painted of Jack and Sue's life with their two precious jewels. I loved the song. Like Kav and Josy, it fit their lives and their love perfectly. Congratulations on your first entry into the world of fanfic challenges! Great start and we'll expect more from you in the future!

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Lynn

any
Tere, you gave us a wonderful treat as your first fanfic!!!

The images you put in my mind with your well chosen words were fantastic! I could almost hear the giggles from Sue and the kids!

I truly hope to read some more pieces from you someday.
Anne
Beautiful Tere! I love the song, it said so much and fit Jack and Sue so well. The way you wrote Jack's thoughts as he observed his beautiful family was so well done. The song and your writing blended together so well. What a beautiful Hudson family playing in the leaves sharing their love. autumn.gif clapgirl.gif
GinaSue
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How did I miss your story, Tere?? It was beautiful, and you painted a wonderful picture of a happy family. Thank you so much, and I'm SO glad I found it!!

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jack fan
Great job, so sweet! girl_sigh.gif
Red Shores Lady
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Thank you so much for sharing Tere!

Very sweet.

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Oreolover
Oh, that was fun to read! The song was a perfect choice. Thank you so much for sharing the story with us!
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kw9171
So cute.
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